Thursday, October 15, 2009

a chest full of childhood...

The story is finished! Thanks for reading and for your comments! I'll let you know what happens. :)

5 comments:

Pink Ink said...

Love your story, Georgie. Such a contrast between the two older women. And you fill in their characters nicely with the dialogue. It's true; lasting beauty lies within us.

Good luck! I'm chairing Reflections in my kids school right now. I think the theme is gonna produce some awesome entries like yours.

Q said...

If you need to cut something, I'd say you don't really need to talk about Vera.

thedomesticfringe said...

I thought that was great! You really made me want to keep reading it. Good job.

-FringeGirl

Coleman said...

Loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!
IT WAS GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!

I loved the personalities of the people--I was shocked by how wonderfully it was writen.

You did say you wanted a little bit of feed back so I'll say I
L-O-V-E-D it. there is just one little thing I'd do. After the whole array of objects in the chest, there was a "were there." I would subtract that but I aint' a editor:)

Georgie K. Buttons said...

I noticed that, Coleman. Thanks for pointing it out. :)

Thanks, everyone!